Once upon time a man was going fishing for his family because there were poor. So the man went to fish at lake near by his house, so the man got in his boat and threw his net to the lake and waited. The man was so tired waiting for the fish he sat down.
All of a sudden, he caught a lot of fish in his net. Once he caught it, he put it in his boat and then he was about to drive home happy with his fish, then all of a sudden a crocodile jumped up to get his fish but then he quickly grabbed a stick to wack the crocodile, but then the crocodile broke it with his teeth.
Then he thought to himself quickly to throw one fish on the other side of the lake, then he threw one fish on the other side of the lake, then his plan worked then he quickly drove back with his fish back to shore. Then he quickly got out and took his fish and ran quickly like a lion back home.
I like the idea you have. You have an orientation, complication and resolution. We can work together to add more details. I am very proud of you Faleaka! Keep trying. Mrs Tui
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